Persuasive Writing

we are learning to write persuasively.
We know that each piece of persuasive writing starts with ann introduction which states the problem and our position on the topic.
We then give our argument.
Our writing then ends with a conclusion which restates our opinion.
Here is Eva's persuasive writing. The topic was "A movie should be played every afternoon at school" This is what Eva thought.

You go to school in the morning not very excited at all. You work for hours and you think you should get a movie after lunch? As good as it sounds it actually isn't a very good idea.
Firstly there i s only an hour after lunch so you would not be able to finish the movie leaving a crowd of disappointed children.
Secondly, there are so many movies so that if we watched one each day we would eventually watch all the good children movies and would have to move on to little kids movies, which wouldn't be much fun.
Another point is that we will be wasting one hour of valuable learning time each day and we will get behind in our work.
Therefore we shouldn't watch a movie every single day.